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Ravenous

September 5th, 2010 (03:49 pm)

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Title: Ravenous

Author: Del Rion (delrion.mail (at) gmail.com)

Fandom: Heroes

Era: Slightly post-Heroes

Genre: Drama

Rating: K+ / FRC

Characters: Mohinder Suresh (, Mira Shenoy)

Summary: The monster inside us never truly dies.
Complete.

Written for: Heroes_Contest’s (heroes_contest) Drabble Challenge 24: In the Shadows

Warnings: Implied violence and animalistic behavior.

Beta: Mythra (mythras_fire)

Disclaimer: The show, its characters, its places, and everything else, belong to Tim Kring and the other respective creators and owners of ‘Heroes’. I have made no profit by writing this story, and make no claim over the show.

Feedback: Most welcome!


About Ravenous: Written for a challenge, this was the second idea I got. A short, random little piece of fiction, but I’ve rarely written about someone other than Peter, so here goes.


Story and status: Below you see the writing process of the story. If there is no text after the title, then it is finished and checked. Possible updates shall be marked after the title.

Ravenous



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Written for Heroes_Contest’s Drabble Challenge 24 (In the Shadows).





Ravenous



The world is still and quiet. Wind moves in a quiet whisper, carrying the smell of damp grass. Animals are silent, waiting and in hiding. A lonely bird flies between the trees, wings beating the air as it stops and lands on a branch.

A recent rain has made the moss soft and moist. His fingers sink into it, his clothes soaking up the wetness, but he doesn’t care. The hunger is too great; everything else is of secondary importance.

Moving in the shadows, quiet like a slithering snake, he approaches. His stomach is aching, but his senses tell him he is near. Anticipation builds in his chest. Soon…

He can hear footsteps on the stone, hurried but uncertain. The park is dark, and his prey feels the shadows closing in. The shadows will hide the predator until he is close enough to attack, to grab her and take her away. He will be quick. No one will hear a sound.

Closer he moves, hand settling on top of a twig, making it bend until it snaps softly. He hears her steps slow down, and when he finally catches a glimpse of her, she’s looking worried. Dark eyes looking into the trees, her heart beating fast, breaths creating a cloud in the cool air.

She moves to continue, movements hurried.

He attacks, for he is hungry and she is perfect.

The horror on her face as she falls down and looks upon his face, the scream dying in her throat –

Mohinder woke up with a start. His heart was beating madly in his chest, and his stomach ached. He could almost feel the hunger, the need to survive driving him… For a moment in the darkness of the room he wasn’t sure where he was, because the dream was so real. He could almost smell the forest.

Then he looked beside him, at Mira’s sleeping face, and forced himself to calm down. It was just a dream.

An echo of a beast long gone.





The End

Comments

Posted by: Sam (sanetwin16)
Posted at: September 12th, 2010 01:12 am (UTC)

Very Nice look into Mohinders thoughts and fears over what he was becoming

Posted by: Del Rion (del_rion)
Posted at: September 12th, 2010 09:12 am (UTC)

Thank you ^^ This was my first Mohinder-centric fic, and... well, it's been a while since I saw him as a monster. Glad you liked! Thanks for reading.

Posted by: Jack (jackvelvet)
Posted at: September 15th, 2010 08:17 pm (UTC)

Posted by: Del Rion (del_rion)
Posted at: September 15th, 2010 08:48 pm (UTC)

*bows deep* Thank you. I think some of the things in the show were left very much hanging - especially the characters' past dilemmas and experiences. They were dismissed as soon as possible, perhaps to make it easier for the writers to move on. Anyway, glad you liked!

Posted by: Paynesgrey (paynesgrey)
Posted at: September 17th, 2010 08:54 pm (UTC)
peter

Ooh, very nice. I loved the flow and language in this. So creepy. Great work!

Posted by: Del Rion (del_rion)
Posted at: September 17th, 2010 09:03 pm (UTC)

haha, thank you! I wasn't sure if it was creepy at all... guess it was in the end, at least a bit ;)

love your icon, btw! lovely Peter...

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